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A MOMENT OF REALITY

Submitted by Jackweb on Thu, 2023-03-02 09:49

The harsh reality
of this moment
have kept me
on a waste land
I'm now a dune
complex
left in a
landscape

a myriad of thoughts
piercing through
my burdened soul

my hopes are
punctured
my vivid dreams
now a futile pleasure

I had envisioned
the admiring glances
in the near future

that I would be a
pathfinder whose
legacy shall stand
the taste of time

but this harsh
times have crossed
a rubicon now
I'm the haunted horse

seeking a way out
and recuperate
taste again
the sweet
side of life

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2023-03-02 10:16

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your poem is powerful with stimulating imagery. I love it!

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Jackweb

Thu, 2023-03-02 10:23

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Much appreciated for the read.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2023-03-02 10:43

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in this line: The (hash) reality change (harsh) for hash (in two places)

I really like these lines:
seeking a way out
and recuperate
taste again
the sweet
side of life

*hugs, Cat

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And reply in kind, thanks.

Jackweb

Thu, 2023-03-02 10:46

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Thanks for the review.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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