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Modern Conveniences

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Mon, 2022-09-19 00:19

I keep calling my mother's voicemail,
though she’s been gone for months,
to hear her voice again
I consider leaving a message, but don’t

Even with loss in bloom,
I’m sure I’ll be stronger soon
Maybe I’ll think of something to say
when the torrent of memories
aren’t crashing in all around me

It’s just a simple message to leave
You’ll be there one more time for me
so we can talk about how we’ve been,
here among the ashes

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Last few words: 
Loss, one of the eternal engines of poetry.
Editing stage: 
Editing - polished draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Mon, 2022-09-19 10:16

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Hello, Michael,
So much to love here, but I think the title really is the foundation. I feel your loss, perhaps all the more because of the loss of my own mother a few years back. You've captured the desire for another phone call, another conversation. I think when ready, you should go for it. I doubt that you would neither be the first, nor the last.
Thank you for this gripping, yet tender poem.
L

Michael Anthony

Tue, 2022-09-20 19:42

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Thanks L, and always appreciate you stopping by! Sorry to hear of your loss too.

Best

Michael Anthony

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