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missing footsteps

Submitted by judyanne on Sat, 2010-11-06 23:03

Two things never disappoint.
With unconditional love
even when you make mistakes
they soothe the soul with a touch, look, hug
that can heal the aches.

And because they are innocence
the universe allows the loan
of power usually only granted the gods
to wrest and twist a smile from a frown.
Young children and old dogs.

Two things from my past world I miss.
Two different types of feet.
Two two-legged forever following me
and a set of four bounding behind to the beat
of tail-wagging, tongue-hanging glee.

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judyanne

Sun, 2010-11-07 09:28

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thanks for the lovely comment
i have changed the title - what do you think of it?
happy to hear any other suggestions....

love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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judyanne

Sun, 2010-11-07 09:30

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your thoughts are greatly appreciated - do you like the change?
any other ideas???

i'm reviewing the first line - would appreciate any thoughts

love judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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judyanne

Sun, 2010-11-07 09:32

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thanks for visiting
as you can see i've changed the title - do you like it?

love and hugs ss
judd
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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judyanne

Sun, 2010-11-07 09:36

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i don't know what you mean by 'incite of the poem'......

i have changed the title - what do you think of it?
thanks for the visit and crit hun
love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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judyanne

Sun, 2010-11-07 22:49

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there is nothing to forgive
i ever appreciate your comments
and obviously if you don't understand the poem it is half my fault - this one needed the better title to set people's minds onto the right track for the read...

thanks for the re-visit
love to you
judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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magics02

Sun, 2010-11-07 09:49

I know of what you speak of here Judy and having read your book I know how much you miss those footsteps. You speak of the unconditional love and that is just what I got in this write. You know that no one person will get a poem or understand its meaning unless they feel and image the write. That is just what I have done here and it is sad but meaningful.

imho

Love to you Aussie Mom
xoxoxo magics

judyanne

Sun, 2010-11-07 09:56

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this began as a poem about the four-legged lost footsteps
but as for the two two-legged....
they just seemed to naturally fit in there - the memory wasn't complete otherwise.....

love to you
judyxxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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judyanne

Sun, 2010-11-07 10:52

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so glad you liked this

love
judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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Ayaz Warith

Sun, 2010-11-07 11:18

This is just a great poem, Judy. I loved this poem because I can see a lot many things that make me read it again and again.
Regards
Ayaz

judyanne

Sun, 2010-11-07 22:50

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thanks for the visit
love judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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scribbler

Sun, 2010-11-07 19:58

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Missed the first title but this one does fit. The innocence of pets and children make them very easy to love and also easy to miss when they're gone or grown. If I keep running my mouth this comment will be as long as your wonderful poem lol......scribbler

judyanne

Sun, 2010-11-07 22:52

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thanks so much for the visit and comment
so true that i miss my pets of yesteryear terribly at times

love judy
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'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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