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Miss Me

Submitted by docmaverick on Tue, 2011-01-04 10:34

It's been so lovely lately
come sing me of your tune,

there's nothing between us
but, the brightness of the moon.

You goin" through them changes
makes me no nevermind

but, when you do so.....tread lightly,
and please try not, to be so unkind.

Miss be baby,
miss me, girl.....please...
..miss me, honey,
miss me with all that;

(repeat refrain, please.)

But, even if there were rainbows
at the daybreaks' end,

you can't help from changin',
but, I must know that your my friend,

You're goin' through changes
and, I can't say that I mind;

but, when you go through them there changes,
don't be so unkind.

Miss me, baby
miss be baby, pleeaase!
miss me, bsby,
miss me with all THAT!

(repeat refrain, please).

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

raj

Tue, 2011-01-04 14:07

this write of yours or should i be saying lament..has a nice beat and rhythm to it of your heartbeats...i was prompted to call it a lament because of the element of craving which is very palpable...

warmly..

raj (sublime_ocean)

docmaverick

Tue, 2011-01-04 19:33

docmaverick's picture

..I see what you mean, after re-reading it; I just hope that it is a lament, more than a rant! Thanx, for your comment; it had substance.
doc.

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