It's fourteen lines alright, and the rhyme scheme is consistent, but you didn't look out for meter. Going by the strict definition of the form, this may not be considered a sonnet.

I'm not sure if you could pass this off as a free verse sonnet.

Yeah there are far too many who spend an inordinant amount of time in front of mirrors lol. Now as to sonnet form.....to begin with I'll say up front that this form aggravated the hell out of me every time I try one. But the one thing that your attempt lacks is attention to syllable count. In almost all its forms a sonnet requres no more or less than 10 syllables per line. And most are also written in iambic meter. Also if my weak memory doesn't fail me, the last 2 lines should display at least a minor "twist". So as far as I know sonnet= 3 quatrains + 1 rhyming couplet with each line containing 10 syllables. And as far as I've been able to determine with the limited research I've done the couplet is the only stanza which Requires rhyme but in most sonnets I've read rhyming is carried throughout. I guess this is about as clear as mud lol...........stan

I say never let yourself be limited by the constraints of form or of free verse. My concern is that without considering meter, even in free verse, will make you miss the music of your poetry. To me it really is about singing a song to the universe. For example, this is not a form poem it's simply two rhyming quatrains in an a,b,a,b c,d,c,d rhyme and a rhyming couplet. I would say chant it, find the music behind it The emphasis goes on every other syllable. I know you'll feel it.
Pleasure by RW-
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It pleases me to effortlessly hang upon a rhyme
It eases me to gently clutch to that which I hold dear
Releases me to feathertouch a shapely neck sublime
as teases flare deliciously as my words kiss the ear
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The pleasure inadvertant sees its register in blush
exquisite, unprotected, honest witness of the real
as boyish muscles soon grew strong the boyish mind did rush
and soon thereafter girlish laughter rose to girlish squeal
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politics and status grasped hard to an ibex leaping
double handfulls filled with fleshy passion I am keeping

Ron
Blue Demon77

I appreciate it!

Ron
BlueDemon77

the first and biggest rule of a sonnet is that it is in meter – usually iambic pentameter, but not always…

iambic pentameter is just a fancy way of saying the stresses of the syllables of the words on each line should sound in a soft/HARD pattern, and there should be 10 of them
ta DUM ta DUM ta DUM ta DUM ta DUM

don’t worry about voltas and twists or rhyming couplets that stay with the reader for now… stan is right in his mention of these – but the important thing do get first is the iambic pentameter

so, let’s look at your first verse
You STAND RIGHT be-FORE me – 6 syllables
in AD-mir-AT-ion of self-EM-ul-AT-ed BEAU-ty – 13 syllables
the GIGG-le is spon-TAN-e-ous and GEN-u-INE – 12 ayllables
then YOU BREAK DOWN IN-to a SEEM-ing re-UN-ion – 12 ayllables
- and the stresses of the words don’t all go soft/HARD

with just a little edit
you stand in admiration right before me
self- emulated beauty’s bastion
the giggle is spontaneous and free
you break down into seemingly reunion

You STAND in AD-mir-AT-ion RIGHT beFORE me
self –EM-ul-A-ted BEAU-ty’s BAST-i-ON
the GIGG-le IS spon-TAN-e-OUS and FREE
you BREAK down IN-to SEEM-in-LY re-UN-ion

I need to point out lines 1 and 4 have an extra soft stress at the end of the line – these are called feminine lines, and are allowable with the Shakespearean sonnet

so really loved – you were not far out…
try the second verse yourself….

I was interested in all the comments above… and in relation to those
can I say that a sonnet does not have to rhyme – in fact Shakespeare wrote most of his works in what is called blank verse… in my opinion, they are harder to write and keep musical, as one doesn’t have the assistance of the rhyme for this

love judy xxx