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the mindset of vengeance

No ailment can prevail over my one
true purpose that my heart yearns towards.

That purpose is to kill the destructive demented demon that
mutilates our humanity . leaving those whom survived with deprived minds
To do only one thing to dive deep down into
the insufferable iniquitous realms
Of insanity.

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For vengeance is like a chain to which we our bounded to and we can or eventually will make others be bounded to the chains of vengeance that just brings the world more pain.
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over the earlier prosaic poems

you have the brilliance

so many humans lack

share your mind more

You will endure

of that I'm sure

well done kid

Thank you

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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You grow more eloquent with each poem. ~ Geez.
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Thank you

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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Thank you

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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