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Mind Me

Submitted by loved on Thu, 2012-04-05 15:09

Mind
is used up or consumed
ere the
Body
is buried or exhumed
and the
Soul
is invisible
as much as are
I and you...
Period.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Thu, 2012-04-05 17:44

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I will come and fetch you when I reach that other side or at least send you a map lol.
I have been waiting for a day for someone to look at my latest piece that sits lonely "Lost Sight" I guess it is invisible this is why I am "P'd" off with this site as I cleared the Undiscovered poetry place and my little poem was so lonely there La La, Sparrow is getting cross, go well young Bard Yours, Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Thu, 2012-04-05 22:57

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and
don't feel lost
I shall read and find your
LOst
its surely our loss ,
when we are pushed down...
so upgrade

That's why i say no second posting,
till last one is read ,
but here too
no one listens to me..
tc

loved

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judyanne

Fri, 2012-04-06 15:06

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this has really good rhythm and really effective rhyme and really lously philosophy
(((((smile)))))

no point saying any more about that for we are all at our own place and in the place we are meant to be
and there will be no arguing with you lol
but (and now i am lmao) i hope i die before you, 'cos i want to see your face when you do
you are in for a big surprise

hugs
judy

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

loved

Fri, 2012-04-06 21:01

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so sweet
and thanks

loved

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