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The Mind Is Free

A man's body shackled by sickness,
lying on the bed, weakened
but his mind can still be free
to dance in his fantasy,
to fly with the mighty eagles
looking at the world from above,
to explore the wonders of space
witness the birth of a planet
or to journey to the past
reviving the good times shared
with loving family and friends

The body may be imprisoned
but the mind is free

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I like everything about this.

A typo "explore"
And you need to space between "witness the".

Hope you'd have a quick recovery.

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Thanks for the visit and pointing out the mistakes. The pain can be very distracting.

Alid

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So true! The mind can leave the body behind and journey to wherever it wants - television has helped, opening up the imagination to new and interesting things.

Good one!

Love Mand xxxx

I hope you're feeling o.k today - not in to much pain. :(

thanks for the visit and comments.

Alid

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this is what I am currently feeling as I am recovering from a surgery, so I supposed writing from real experience made it more heartfelt in its execution. Thanks for the visit and comments.

Alid

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Very nice and spirited poem.

Be well..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

for the comment and visit.

Alid

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include she and bi etc
gay and lesby
will ye modify ur poetry
mindly and kindly

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