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Midnight song

pause of time:

through the mid

wide awaken birds

the moon shines

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Last few words: 
À la manière de ee. cummings’ “The Red Wheelbarrow”
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content


I'm a bit unsure what to think about this but figured I'd let you know I dropped by......stan

Thank you. It’s more like a creative writing exercise, where I took a famous poem and create something similar. Either way, this poem’s concept, as well as its original, is to capture the moment,
to “shoot” a living image.

author comment

an expanded Haiku then?

Yes, kind of.

author comment

Mostly, creative writers embraces midnight as a preferred atmosphere for creating their thoughts on paper. But here it seems you lost the idea or the subject You intend to write. (E.g) ...the moon shines away!

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the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

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