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A Message From The Moon

                                                                                                            while

                                                                                 everyone

                                                             on earth

                                             was burning,

                     and yearning

for a mundane affair,                   

                        a crescent was born

                         it peaked above us all

                                                     with a spiritual call                 

                                                                asking

                                                                                 everyone

                                                                                   to heal                      

                                         

                                                                   

                                                                                      

 

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one more example of your innovation and creativity. I liked both the form and substance of the verses creating a crescent smile of the moon.

Well done artist Rula...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I thought of this as the newly born crescent of this month brought the holy month of Ramadan which brings so many blessings for the Muslims who fast this month. Saying that, I preferred to keep it general as each moon is so special and always holds an aloof message while shining through the darkness.
Thanks for your supportive kind words friend.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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a good way to express a holy sentiment.

on a lighter note I would tell you not to fast on poems....:)
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I'll try not to :)
Thank you again.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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It does take a lot of time especially that it's the first shape poetry for me,however, I thought it's worth it to express the mood of such a month.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Dear Rula, Ramadan Kareem

a very encouraging message, and a very meaningful shape poem.

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

kindest friend.
Highly appreciate your passing by and the wishes.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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artistic, surrealistic and universalistic. Well designed and well expressed.

and lots of thanks for reading and commenting.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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I never understood why a poem in a shape is called that...

I have troubles doing anything like this on the site- indentions, italics...how were you able to paste this up? I cannot find the means in the formatting section.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

I think she may have done this using space bar...just a wild guess
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I'm trying to find you a very rich blog by Kelsey (swamp witch) on how to do it. It needs more than just one step.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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this link should help
Please don't hesitate to ask if you need any further help

https://www.neopoet.com/swamp-witch/blog/sat-2014-03-22-2100

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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you always beat me
so I only admire thee

some time ago
I also composed
a crescently poetry
but it always lined up
along the side lines of neo's
and let the crescent go

now I also know
how about it to go

Loved. I'm happy to know that you like it.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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I always bow to Ladies Rula
and ur
one

wonderful!

Thank you

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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Posting form poetry can be a real challenge. I know this is supposed to be a crescent as well as what the shape stands for. That all being said it would come across better if the shape was a bit smoother.......stan

I of course understand your point. I tried my best for a smoother shape, but the site advanced formatting wouldn't help much to show shapes. I however have done some minor edits as recommended by you and wonder if the shape now looks any better.
Always appreciate your time and thoughts.
Be well.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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G
re
ate
work
as us
ual wi
th a lot
of wor
k put
into
it
x
Take care, Yours as always Ian. x

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

It's lovely to read you and definately a fan of concrete poetry, haven't done one like this for an age.

I cannot add anynore its all been said before me

Well done !!

Kind regards J x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

dear Jayne. Thank you for your kind words.
Always appreciated.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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