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Memories of Yester Years

I stand upon the shelf,
nay threshold of time
looking over my,
and her shoulders,
as she read and bore
a red face in anger.

How did I dare to put on paper?
The mannerisms of students,
long since forgotten
of a demeaning behaviour,

Truant what you say
my child
lest I go more wild,
be gone like a passionate breeze
go in the snows and freeze
become a forgotten morn
and
of this incident,
never ever again yawn.

She planted on the shelves of time
a beautiful composition of mine ,
entrenched with wrath
I came out alert,
hurt and curt ...
never will I compose
what I want to

yet I would continue
and
thus Anonymity did crown me
that day,
that was some decades
far, far, yet far away.

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Gone with the wind? seems I heard that before lol. You might want to replace this worn phrase . Also try using looking over her shoulders without the nay. Other that these nit picks I liked this backwarg thinking look into the past.............stan PS Gone with the wind....you can do better lol

gone with the wind
was an older wine
in a newer bind
let me now grind and remove
the nay,
lest someone else does say
i only bray..
.thanks Stan ,
you rrrrrr the man...

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I liked this lines:

She planted on the shelves of time
a beautiful composition of mine ,
entrenched with wrath
I came out alert,
hurt and curt ...
never will I compose
what I want to

very reflective piece.
always, Cat

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