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The Melody of Rick

With sparks of creativity
Ricks' life created a tune,

he finally played his last refrain
in late January, at around noon.

Throughout his life, this man named, Rick
carved out a tune one could sing along,

he was unaware he'd created a symphony
from a simple tune, from a simple song.

But, that is what he precisely did
as his soul reached down, deep to sing;

his proficiency in playing the song in his heart,
countless joys, and memories does that melody, bring.

Now, his pain has finally, ceased
he's joined that big band, in heaven, above;

and, for those who were blessed to hear the melody of Rick;
know beyond a doubt, it was the melody of love!

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Structured: Western
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Comments

i;m going to go with the obvious part and that's the whole change in structure thru the piece. it just keeps stretching! i'd suggest putting some more work into this one, it might have a little potential.
keep writing

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