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the meeting

we exchanged greetings
eyes open wide
aware of our souls awakening
memories flooding our minds
not a word spoken of them
except for your extended ohhhhs

your wide-mouthed grin
spoke volumes
as did your eyes that
at first stared rigidly
at me until they
grew so big they looked
like they could pop out
of your head
then you beat on your
puffed up chest
with the fist of one hand
grinning mischievously at me

we both laughed
when you shook
your rear from side to side
when our eyes locked
you winked and
flashed me that
familiar smile
then with lips closed
nostrils flaired you drew in
my scent not once
but twice as though
you were savoring it
and saving it
to take along with you

Faith Elizabeth Brigham

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Very lovely, very expressive, paints a picture we can see and feel, with wonderful sweetness and romanticism. I wouldn't want a single hair touched from this poem. love the "extended ohhhs". love it all.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Thank you for your wonderful remarks. I deeply appreciate them.

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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Thank you very much for reading and responding to my poem. Your comments are nost appreciated.

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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Love is in the air, as it is Spring here.
Took me back a few years to a place that I loved to be,
though the strain on feelings is huge,
Love to love, and be loved, with a lovely piece,
So good to see you return to us here and remember that we remember your writes.
NO more 5 year breaks please.
Yours Ian..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Oh, Ian. Thank you so much for your wonderful remarks. I am both humbled and honored by them. It feels great to be back.

Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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I thank you, Mark. Not sure exactly what you are wanting. The place ? Maybe some dialog. Please be more specific. Thanks.

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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