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Meet Me at The Clubhouse

It happened every summer
When vacation time was near,
"Meet me at our clubhouse"
Many little boys would cheer.

At our special clubhouse
Secret tales were what we shared,
We could plan our whole fun summer
And "no girls" we soon declared.

It was just a special place and time
Found just down the street,
Where Jeff and John and others
Would hang out...our live complete!

But little boys and others
Grow up and move away,
And before we ever knew it
There were other things at play.

Some went off to college
While some went off to war,
Some would live to work or serve
And some would live no more.

But life is like a circle
And what was can sometimes be,
So meet me at the Clubhouse
And we'll sit and talk and see.

We may go there for a cool one
Or perhaps some food to claim,
We'll meet with friends both old and new
And perhaps we'll watch a game.

We'll meet down at the clubhouse
The one on Center Street,
Where Rocky and his special crew
With friendly smiles are there to greet.

We'll meet and talk about old times
We'll talk sports victories and defeats,
But mostly we'll spend time with friends
At the Clubhouse there on Center Street.

As I sit here in this special pace
I smile at the chatter and the noise,
And I long for that old clubhouse
When we were just those little boys.

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From the ages of about 8-11 years of age, my favorite place during summer was our not so secret clubhouse, hanging out with all my friends. I now enjoy meeting with a select group of friends each Wednesday for a bite to eat, a beer or two and conversation at the Center Street Clubhouse (bar & grill) in Pocatello, ID. No matter the age or circumstances, meeting with old friends nurtures the sole, and thus "Meet Me At The Clubhouse" was born.
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Comments

What you have is very special. Childhood friends are often lost to adulthood and commitment. I believe your commitment to still meet up and hang out is really nice. I have two friends from the old neighborhood I’m still in touch with. We don’t often get to hang out. Opposite coasts. I was out west for a visit a few summers back. We try and text every so often. My other old neighbor and I have only recently reconnected, we have yet to meet up for coffee but we message and talk on the phone. It’s nice to have that.

The poem is structured well. Nice rhyme. I appreciated your last words but I already knew that’s what was going on. You’ve got a nice beginning, middle, and end. Really good theme and positive mood.

Tim

to me like a short story. The rudiments of poetry is hardly found in this piece except the rhyme aspect of of it. Nicely written!

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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Thank you for your feedback, critical critique is always important. I often write my poetry within multiple quatrain stanzas precisely so I can tell a short story.

Many years ago I had an instructor who taught that multiple stanza quatrain poetry was every bit as legitimate as any other form of poetry. I've always enjoy writing quatrains (either a single stanza quatrain or multiple stanzas) but I've never met any form of poetry that I didn't enjoy.

Be well, be safe, and keep on putting pen to paper. - Bill

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