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I've been around a little while
and seen and learned a lot.
I've walked many a rugged mile
beyond where asphalt burns so hot.

All of which I'd like to share
with friends when they come to call,
sometimes by laying my soul as bare
as grafiti on a crumbling wall.

But I'm not one to give a speech
(public speaking makes me sweat)
I'd rather walk a sandy beach
or lonely hollows, better yet.

So this leaves me little choice
in how to share some part of me.
I take my pen and toss my voice
upon this silicone electron sea.

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to have read all waiting down the line
of poetry since ages
today none is balance
not even urs now 43 minutes ago
thank me and ask the guys
the management to read ten waiting ones
daily

loved

My spare time has been pretty scarce lately so I haven't been visiting other writers as I should. But when I DO have time eventually you'll wish I'd shut up lol. Thanks for dropping by...........stan

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to make it into a proper sentence I would add have seen etc I see where you wanted the all and wall to rhyme but it does not seem to fit especially when you began the stanza with all

You are sharing a part of you in your wonderful words. Such talent

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

Hmmm....
I see what you mean about that stanza. Let's see if I can improve it a bit........................................try it now. Always good to hear from you and thanks for the honest review............stan

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beginning the sentence: "[All of which], I'd like to share"
How about: [This is what] " I'd like to share ". ?
As per usual, a great visual! I have the vision of someone writing words upon the air
and them falling on a golden sea of electrons and wafting across my sky!
~ Gee

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Opps! Too late, I've already changed it in another manner lol. Maybe it will work well. I appreciate your visit, ideas and kind remark...............stan

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We will read all you write, and there is never a need to ask us.
Love your journeys, and it is always a pleasure to walk with you.
Yours Ian.T and Me

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I sure didn't mean for this to come across as me begging to be read. It's Supposed to conveyhy I write as well as choice of medium. I guess I missed the mark.............stan

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Over the years I have gained the odd American coinage so please tell me where to send them, just yesterday there was a Dime in my pocket.
You never need to "beg to be read" an old poetic statement from me and Loved LOL..
Go well young Stan have a great day, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

You have a good day too.........stan

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I'm so glad you share your poems with us on the silicone electron sea. We can see things through your senses. Like you I'm no good at giving speeches - we can be ourselves when writing poetry etc on the internet. As I've come to expect your rhyming is spot on and it runs smoothly.

Excellent Stan.

Love Mand xxxxx keep em comin!

I am glad that there are others who think my stuff worth reading. Thanks for dropping by............stan

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though I'm not sure what is 'the sillicon electron sea' is, yet I always like to read your words, no matter what the medium is.

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The chips which allow computers to be made are silicon and the electrons are the signals sent over the internet. If not for the two of them we'd not be able to read each others poetry without buying a book. And since the only book I have published is an E-book we couldn;t even do that lol..........stan

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Thanks for the clarification. I do remember you or someone else has clarified this before but I forget all about it. Does this indicate any of alzahaymer symptoms? :)

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I think I DID write one before that had a silicon reference (And I think it also was a reference to computers not breast implants lol). Not to worry about........about.................what was I talking about?...........stan

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