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McPherson Park

You’re a photograph
Brilliant forsythia
On a sunshine day
Everything full bloom

Walking the walkways
Fresh memories
You make me young
Or at least younger

Graceful the movement
From gentle breezes
Working willow strings
Under fair weather clouds

You are McPherson park
Creating your affects
Crisscrossed fragrances
Newborn wholesomeness

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is okay. This poem made me feel like going out for a walk in the fresh air and the balmy breezes.
Is the word you are looking for "affects" or [effects]? The words are close in meaning in some ways; but do mean different things in certain circumstance. ~ Geezer.
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Great to know that and it was a toss up between the two. I almost looked em up and now I will.
You rock big guy!
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~Mark~

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It is most meaningful as is.
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that it was affect; I agree that it would change the meaning of that line and I know I like it better that way.~ Gee.
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Mark This is a wonderful poem. I could just feel the warm spring day and see all the fantastic imagery.
You are a master of imagery you know. I could just see a freshly painted landscape of McPherson Park that day. You've got it all together and I loved it.
Pat

You were a great muse and contributor to the original draft that day.
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~Mark~

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I feel very honored to be a muse and contributor to one of your wonderful poems.

Pat

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