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MAZE edit

Submitted by Geremia on Tue, 2015-12-15 05:42

MAZE

I meander in a maze of thoughts
dark and deeply hidden
in memory's prison
moments best left forsaken
cruel epiphanies of sad recollections
haunting my waking hours.
there is no escape from self.
no chance to change the past.
for all has been written
and fortoid
marked by hell's fire
and Heaven's rage.

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lovedly

Tue, 2015-12-22 14:22

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i just also composed on soul
yesterday in Chicago
I met a guy from Florida
he did not know you Joe
sad coz he was an engineer or so
poetry what tis
he did not know

Geremia

Tue, 2015-12-22 14:26

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Floridais a big state. I will read youyr poem

joe

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scribbler

Sat, 2016-01-09 21:59

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First the typo in line 10 , foretold not forted lol. You might consider deleting"the" in line 7 also. Like the poem as well as the message......stan

Geremia

Sun, 2016-01-10 14:05

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Will do. Thank you, Stan.

joe

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