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Maslows slippery slope.

Desire-
is a plump
fickle comely
wench; Want- is but
a breakfast in bed, Need-
is a dump a pee and a trump
and a bint with a bodkin and thread.

Obi.

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how I see this one:

Desire-
is a plump
fickle, comely
wench; Want is but
a breakfast in bed, Need-
is a dump, a pee and a trump
and a bint [what is a bint?] with a bodkin and thread.

~ Geezer.
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..but a "trump" although "pump" would work okay for me in it's place.
Your entertaining rhyme is kind of like a limerick and has a similar bounce. Is there a name for the form?

Thomas

....so like my lost dreams...the flood

Hiya chaps,
geez, a "bint" is British slang for woman,,, (not a nice word really).

Trisk. perhaps "pump" would work better, thanks for that.

The form was originally a pyramid to echo the work of (psycobabbylist) Maslow's hierarchy of needs, represented as a pyramid with the more basic needs at the bottom, though, the forum won't let me post it that way, so, slippery slope it is!

Cheers lads. Obi.

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Quench your thirst
first
settle your stomach 'next
have energy
then SEX (AS YOU SAY WITH A BINT)
and
POWER
have no limit
stretch it as much may be
it's elastic only
will revert gradually
BUT SLOWLY

take it easy
lol

LOL. Nice one!

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for your niceee
appreciationay
like Charodnay
lol

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