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MASK
MASK
I hope that you will understand:
I have no need to win her heart-
I just have years of need to know,
Did she understand the part
Of me she saw so many years ago,
One April night, when time stood still?
She'd looked into an emptiness
That only you have filled…
Embarrassed by old memories,
I search for shreds of dignity,
Some token that says she had seen
And recognized that it had been
An involuntary cry, whose cause
Was some uncertain sense of loss,
A momentary glimpse at pain
Behind a mask that would not slip again…
And maybe, when you hear this song
Someday, you’ll come to understand
This was no waywardness along
My road, no loss of self-command:
Just purging of a fear to know
What image I’d find in this cask:
I want you to know this, my love,
To you, I’ve never worn a mask:
You know you are, have always been,
Will always be my woman, first and last…
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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scribbler
Sat, 2010-12-04 22:17
mask
You know you're truly loved when somebody sees the real, hidden you and loves you anyway. You put this much better in your poem/song............scribbler
scribbler
Sat, 2010-12-04 22:19
mask
You know you're truly loved when someone sees the real hidden you and still loves you anyway. You put this much better in your poem/song................scribbler
Psyve
Mon, 2010-12-06 12:48
Scribbler,
Thanks for stopping by.
What you say is true, though, perhaps that was not the thrust of this poem....
Psyve
author commentPsyve
Mon, 2010-12-06 12:50
Amal
You are of course right about the third person in the background in this song.
And yes, this is a sad song....
Glad you liked it, tho.
Thank you for reading / listening to this one.
Psyve
author commentCandlewitch
Wed, 2010-12-08 14:55
Dear Psyve,
A very sad song indeed. I could very much relate to it. Many captivating lines, but my favorites were:
Just purging of a fear to know
What image I’d find in this cask:
always, Cat (and Eddy)
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Psyve
Wed, 2010-12-08 15:33
Cat
Thank you for stopping by to listen and comment.
Glad you found you could relate.
Psyve
author commentPsyve
Fri, 2010-12-10 07:45
Longo,
Thank you for listening to this one. Am pleased it worked for you.
P
author commentlou
Thu, 2010-12-09 07:02
Psyve
This is filled with a lot to identify with, i think we all hide behind a mask, and let it slip occasionally.
When we find someone that we reveal ourselves to totally, it is a frightening thing, we become vulnerable.
I found a lot to enjoy.
Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Kailashana2
Thu, 2010-12-09 07:49
And isn't that ironic, Lou?
And isn't that ironic, Lou? We all have the same fear: vulnerability. We all have the same need: to be loved and to love. Unless of course, if we're unbalanced, then all life-denying actions take precedence, take its place.
Though I love the being-behind-the-mask, some masks are downright frightening.
Cool work, Cyrus.
~A
Psyve
Fri, 2010-12-10 07:47
Lou
Of course you are right: when we drop our masks, particularly in front of those we love, that is an act of faith.
Glad you found something in this song that you enjoyed.
P
author commentPsyve
Fri, 2010-12-10 07:52
Anna
I do agree with you.
And it is all about vulnerability ... and trust...
Thank you for stopping by this song.
Glad you liked it.
Psyve
author commentBlue_Halcyon
Wed, 2010-12-22 14:27
Awesome poem
My attention isn't easily retained, and this poem held it to the very end. You have woven the perfect words together in this poem to convey some very intense emotions. Excellent piece of work!
It is such a secret place, the land of tears. ~Antoine de Saint-Exupéry
Psyve
Wed, 2010-12-22 14:37
BH
Thank you for taking the time to read this one. I know its a longish... from the standpoint of most poetry here, so i appreciate your patience.
Glad you liked it.
Psyve
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