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The Man With The Embroidered Skull Cap

Charlie entered the room, sat at a corner table,
his gait was frail, but firmly stable,
all dressed in black,
with a red and black skullcap,
it was neat, no frayed fringes,
his cap opened on hinges,
he sat in his mood,
of troubled solitude,
he was a loner,
he was straight, not a stoner,
but life was in a skid,
as he flipped back his lid,
inside he removed a time piece,
stating that voices wouldn't cease,
he had to let the voices out,
to remove any doubt,
for it really did matter,
to lose that chatter,
as he took out a hammer,
quieted his chatter to a stammer,
he said it was the memories,
from a troubled history
he glanced at the time,
he reached in his cap and took out a rhyme,
he said if he could replace a bad thought,
of some battles he had fought,
then his day could get better,
and he could stop the chatter,
he said it improved his attitude,
life then could get good,
he started to smile,
and in a while,
it was like he was a kid,
flipping back his lid,
he reached deep inside,
with a smile he tried to hide,
for in his hand he pulled some flowers,
out of his lid, an upside down shower,
as flowers of all different kinds,
flowed with musical chimes,
the air was sweet with their fragrance,
it did make a difference,
as the blossoms cascaded,
his presence had faded,
he was disappearing before my eyes,
as I began to realize,
that Charlie was only a dream,
a dream, no longer seen.
Now I think of Charlie, from time to time,
during my day, he comes to mind,
when joy evades me,
when I can't see,
a better way,
to the beauty of the day.


Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Last few words: 
Acrylic 8" X 10" painting of Charlie posted on Instagram under tag trekkerdekker.
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Acrylic 8" X 10" painting of Charlie on Instagram under tag trekkerdekker.

author comment

exactly call this free-form, because it does rhyme all the way through and while the pattern and rhythm
are rather odd, it is maintained all the way. It is an amusing tale and I enjoyed the theme. ~ Geezer.

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