Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Malignant Drone....

Malignant Drone….

I should have blown the phone
and kissed her,
because as I sat all alone,
like stone,
I missed her.

Minutes became stretched as I watched,
while she left with a better prepared guy.
As another app on his bedpost was notched,
my heart said, keep playing, you won’t die.

Then I raced through another game,
my mind, my eyes eternally lost.
Even new excuses became quite lame,
relationships died in my electronic frost.

There was never a thought given to cost,
in fact I would always be quite thrifty.
I embraced this malignant clinging ghost,
even though I was well over fifty.

I was adding new apps as they appeared,
while my thumbs were dancing on screen.
Giants and monsters were soon speared,
while I created another selfy to preen.

Buying and selling is done with a flick,
no need to run to the shops anymore.
Clothes that I bought weren’t chic,
but they’d always arrive at my door.

So the moral, if any can be found,
or perhaps what my verses have shown,
If we don’t lift our heads, look around,
then we’re all just a part of their drone.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
We are so close....
Editing stage: 

Comments

Well said!!!
Much said in few words and they're said well
Thank you for sharing !

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

Please follow me on Instagram
https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=

Thanks Rula, I see it every day on trains, buses, walking in the street. People are living their lives through their phones. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

author comment

a segment of life's truth! Just want to point out; that you can't sit prone. Maybe you should lie prone?
Good work, ~ Gee

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Sometimes finding what we think is the correct word is not every thing. As i tend to write straight from the hip, i generally miss that the words though sounding good are not correct. And so i've edited the part you pointed out.Thank you. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

author comment

Well laid out and brilliant rhythm couldn't find a fault with it at all I tried lol .. but I dont always have my phone on these days its incessant beeping is sometimes too much when I am sick ..

So glad I found this one .. don't know what it is but there is something very different about this poem compared with your other work, cant put my finger on it

loved it though kudos !!

Love Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

Thank you Jayne glad you enjoyed this. I don't think i've changed that much, but i guess i really haven't thought about it until now. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

author comment
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.