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Malignant Clouds (May Contest)

Clouds loom drifting, passing by,
The west wind gently tempts them on
Though no one knows what cause them cry
And no one hears their pleading voice
As all their acid tears well dry.

Snowy white, in rank and file,
The south wind warmly glides them on;
Smiling wryly all the while
Natant high above the earth
Ambling on, mile after mile.

Alluring to the offhand glancer
The east wind briskly chafes them on
Skittering like the showtime dancer
Yet hidden deep within their breast
A growing rude and covert cancer.

But nature's wrath will bid her toll
The north wind casts the clouds astray
Freezing, breezing, pole to pole,
The stricken, tainted, wisps will die ~
Dare no one care to save their soul?

So now as time is dwindling low
As the ill winds clime their worst
The poisoned rains, in flooding flow,
Rape our land to end mankind ~
And still, the winds shall wanton blow.

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

why can I never find fault in your writin,this is no exception

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

'environmental poems in my portfolio but all too long for the May contest Chrys. I did an adolescent fir tree, personified, and pleading not to taken for a Christmas tree but it is a villanelle so only 19 lines ~ needed 25 to 30 lines.
Therefore I wrote this 5 stanza pentastich which seems to fit the bill. At least I have a good chance of coming last in the contest.

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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author comment

and reminiscent of some of the environmental stuff that a friend of mine used to write. She was so concerned about the smog that goes into the air every day and wrote many things about clouds of acid-rain and how it destroys our bodies of water and the environment in general. I found this very insightful and if not a joy to read, at least an acknowledgment from you and others that we are indeed, in serious trouble with our environs. Thank you for this well thought out poem the reader should connect with. ~ Geezer.
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I think that it is worth reflecting on what we have got. We should consider how easy it is to destroy ourselves if we are not so very careful. The present crisis has shown us what can happen to a whole planet in less than half a year.

Thanks, Geezer, for reading and comprehending my poem in honour of Earth Day 2020 (and Neopoet of course).

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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I've read your poem several times - it becomes clearer how small consequences become larger, more serious consequences. The cloud cycle and wind travel in your poem sent me to Google where I learned that many countries suffer with acid rain due to pollution from other parts of the world. I've heard that before, but your poem gave me a much needed image. I don't think I will look at clouds the same, now. I hope we are learning... Also, I admire your poem structure! Lots to learn here, including poetry!
Thank you,
Lavender

and welcome to Neopoet. Thank you for reading my piece, I hope I didn't scare you. Some things need to be said and poetry is a good place to say them.
This poem, of course, is an effort to participate in Neo's monthly contests which this month respects Earth Day. Please check out the requirements of the May contest and see if you have something to submit as an entry. Please don't forget to tick the contest box when you submit.
I have enjoyed a couple of your poems already and suspect you are passionate about our planet and its wonders. You have revealed your contempt, in verse, for caged wild animals and I have to agree with you. I would value your opinion, therefore, on my poem 'Sultan' which is a true story from many years ago here in England where I live.
I look forward to reading your work as you settle in here ~ you are among friends.

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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I have felt very welcome, and am eager to read and share with everyone here. I'm never quite certain how I feel about something until I have put it in writing, or connected with someone else's work, so this is a great outlet. I would very much like to read 'Sultan.'
Thank you,
L

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