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MAKE ME BLUSH....Romantic for a CHANGE
if only I was a bit younger
the hunger would have been
quenched
Lovers poetry
When love is in the air
who can but dare
not to blush
oh it’s all
a
hush, hush
make me blush
if only I was a bit younger
the hunger
would have been quenched
there wouldn't have been any danger
of being drenched.
but then that's a simple desire
an impossible conjecture
in which none of us
today can venture
so blushing alone
be your adventure
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
This poem
is as a consequence of
a blushing remark
by a fellow poet
on my poem
Oh Blush
Editing stage:
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Comments
Geezer
Sat, 2018-10-13 17:31
I never knew...
you were capable of a blush! This is one of your better ones. I would have let the poem stand at the end of "so blushing alone be your adventure". The last few lines belong in the comments by the author. ~ Geezer.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
lovedly
Sat, 2018-10-13 18:20
Seen Geee
and complied
hope now all will know
Lovedly can blush also
lol
zebra
Fri, 2018-10-19 18:33
a plush blush of a poem too ;
a plush blush of a poem too ;)
lovedly
Fri, 2018-10-19 19:09
grateful
thank u hope u also
blushed
at least once
zebra
Wed, 2018-11-28 12:18
Red
Red as chilies
IRiz
Wed, 2018-11-28 09:28
Hi Lovedly, I realy like this
Hi Lovedly, I realy like this poem.
I want to place it on Instagram.
I shortened it to a few lines though.
May I place them on Instagram as this short version of yours, I will sign it "Lovedly"?
I can't post long poems there.
if only
I was a bit younger
the hunger
would have been quenched
so I am blushing alone
IRiz
lovedly
Wed, 2018-11-28 10:12
Wow
Irene
Hope many more will blush with me
thanks you are supreme
Lovedly bows
IRiz
Wed, 2018-11-28 10:29
Lovedly these are your
Lovedly these are your supreme words.
Please say if this is okay to post them on Instagram like this. I will sign it with the name Lovedly. Is this okay?
IRiz
lovedly
Wed, 2018-11-28 12:03
yes yes yes ma'am
yeahh hurrayyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
okayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
IRiz
Wed, 2018-11-28 13:06
thank yyyyyyyyyyou
thank yyyyyyyyyyou kkkkinnnndlyyy
IRiz
lovedly
Wed, 2018-11-28 13:11
what an unique honour
Irene you like my poetry there is one I posted yesterday
you may scan when ever you can
it's all about seas shores life and ocean
IRiz
Wed, 2018-11-28 13:16
i have been reading your
i have been reading your stream all day, man
i just don't comment much
but don't think you are not in my thoughts
IRiz
lovedly
Wed, 2018-11-28 13:20
off the cuff poem
I Walk as an Image
IRiz
Wed, 2018-11-28 14:38
Yes I like it. I will comment
Yes I like it. I will comment on it later. Promise.
IRiz
lovedly
Wed, 2018-11-28 23:27
thanks Irene whenever
I know your plate is
overflowing