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Make Life Meaningful

Submitted by lovedly on Thu, 2020-02-27 12:24

What is Life
but
being given a body
by two persons
forgetting to use
pills or condoms
or other precautions
enjoying themselves
ad lib
and
you arrive crying
all about you are laughing

then like one time slaves
pulling a long rope to run a broad fan
for the king you struggle along
till the unknown time's end

when

no one ever knew
nor ever will

some die in pain
many in hope

so I always say
drink dance and romance
as all do in Paris or France

Like it or not
life is a lonely
but lovely
Romance
So happily dance
prance and romance
it's only a onetime chance

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geezer

Thu, 2020-02-27 23:28

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who will take a little offense at your use of "given birth by two careless persons." There are ' some', yes, that are the result of
carelessness, but for the most part, I think that we are the product of deliberateness! Most of us, want to leave this world knowing that we have left a little bit of us behind tp carry on our legacy. ~ Gee.
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lovedly

Fri, 2020-02-28 00:06

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amended

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