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Madmen, Seers, and Fools

Madmen, seers, and fools [2]

In the light of night
I saw angels play
and daemons bay
at the moon
wonders of a madman’s dream
or eyes of a seer or fool
piercing through
into
galaxies of the mind

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and you're going to hate me for this. But I feel I've read it before. Not accusing you of plagiarism! Just the ideas of Madmen, Seers, and Fools expressed poetically.

cheers,
Jess
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yes, I wrote a longer version. the theme works well for me.

LIKE MADMEN, SEERS AND FOOLS

Riding waves electric
like bolts of lghtening
striking deep inside my brain
I touch upon my own madness
perceptions sharp and clear
dark knowings and understsndings
too painful for my mind to bear
my voice to speak

my thoughts and senses carry me
deeper into seeing
and like madmen, seers and fools
I suddenly know a dfferent dreaming

I hover closely to myself
in fear of separation
looking from the outside in
I watch my body slowly die
no longer able
to hold my soul safe inside

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that's better!
More meat to chew on, even if it is a bit old and stringy [grins]

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet is a workshop. Poets take the time to read and think about your work and offer suggestions.
There is no obligation to make any changes however please acknowledge critique and comments.

its all okay
plagiarism is copying ideas and quotes ....
which we all mostly don't voice

loved

Only that the theme was familiar.

And 'sampling' is no excuse for plagiarism. Titles get used over and over in poetry like "Love" or "Death" it doesn't excuse their unoriginality, and the poems usually reflect the same.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet is a workshop. Poets take the time to read and think about your work and offer suggestions.
There is no obligation to make any changes however please acknowledge critique and comments.

He remembered what he had read before
Some of us may not have been so sharp and I certainly would not!

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