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Machine Gun me!

You inspired
and
used to boost

now you with your mind set
you feel we all are roasted

You give me the insight of a writer's mind
where blind men can see more
than those with eyes

and the brain prompts me to be reborn ,
yes reborn
don't frown

as I am on my last leg
though still fairly sound ,

you are a young one
not fifty yet
many sons you have to still beget
maybe of verse
I can bet

and now I do confess
you give me a vision
I've missed all along
now tis very strong ....

I must go back to school
and become a drop out,
In America that's the biggest qualification
for miners and minters

for Neopoets I 'd love to be one

A philanthropic
S of a Gun!
maybe a Machine gun!
at least a
Loved one!

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you make me smile with this piece bro.

Alid

even if they do so all the while
reading my poetry
in their own style
so smile
alid jaaan
do smile!!!!!!

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author comment

a Neopoet! Your command of the English-language becomes better all the time! [ I mean that as a compliment ]
I remember when you were a great deal more enigmatic [ simply because you didn't understand as much as you do now. That said, I think you should add a [ d ] to the end of the word [inspire]. Good job on making us smile! ~ Gee

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d now added
good suggestion
could be a typo too

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