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Loved & Lovedly

Submitted by Seren on Mon, 2023-01-30 22:17

His Poems soar,
briefly brushing
an aching firmament,
he weeps of forever
in untold fields,
littered with poets
enthralled and touching
brushed wheat words

Epochs float
outside the lines,
sailing unsettled water
cascading currents,
sailing us off course
we are wrecked
more than than
making port

In minute moments
brilliance blossoms in ink,
vast galaxies of wisdom
fall from the heavens,
it is then we observe
the substance
of his soul

When found,
his voice extends
to sing at heavens gate
he is a poet in time
validated, checked
he's at his best

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Last few words:

Lovely loved. This is for you!

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Candlewitch

Tue, 2023-01-31 05:30

dearest Jayne,

in the second stanza: (more than than) remove one of the "than"
I agree, he is pretty unique! your poem does him justice!

*hugs, Sis

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Seren

Sat, 2023-02-04 09:16

Dearest Cat

Thanks for the heads up I dont know how the extra than got in there its totally bizarre it wasnt there when I posted

I did my best to bring him to life in word.

Love Sis xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

author comment

Geezer

Wed, 2023-02-01 12:21

"Old" lovedly is certainly unique! He has made his mark amongst us, as assuredly as the sun comes up and goes down, on this world of poets. I cuss him out regular, and he comes back for more with a smile. He is truly one of a kind! This poem does him justice Jayne. I really love the first stanza, it is most apt, and I wanted you to know, that I think that it captures his essence.
~ Geez.
.

This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

Seren

Sat, 2023-02-04 09:19

Dearest Bro

He is certainly one of a kind over the years he has morphed and changed so many times, it is nice to see his efforts in poetry paying off.

I hope I captured a small part of him, as you said he is unique.

love and higgliest bugs Sis xox

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Lavender

Tue, 2023-01-31 17:11

Loved & Lovedly

Hello, Jayne (and Lovedly),
"...it is then we observe the substance of his soul..." How very true. Hats off to you both!
Lav

Seren

Sat, 2023-02-04 09:22

Dear Lavender

I've known loved for a very long time now I am not sure what years he started at the site but at the beginning and even to some extent now, he's secretive. From what I know and have observed over the years I tried to put into words.

thanks so much for reading, not sure if you realised his first nickname on Neopoet was just Loved, hence the title!

hugs Jayne

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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lovedly

Sat, 2023-02-04 13:36