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LOVE, Possession lost

Love,
sweet scented rock of life,
Untouched by death,
or dawns delight,
not of this world,
a flower that grows,
dimensions
angels blessed, adorned
Of battles lost,
and battles won.
Beneath its blooded flag -
succumb
Save only few
can justly say
good or bad,
they won’t betray.
Residing from the darkness lit
Desire forbid,
or - jealous spit.
That ranks of man
forsake the crown.
in chivalrous act’s
the noble found.
Where does it reside today
The maker never did he say’
What power can make a man remain
Betray his soul,
to ease loves pain.
Humanity
may judge us well,
though life may end
in blooded dell,
of all our deeds
that must be cost
Will love remain,
possession lost

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You could still combine lines to make a more lucid argument, where at other times speed up pace.

This is good work,

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Thanks Salman, Im always advised to put plenty lines in, on neopoet' (Although I never understand why?) so I did it in this case,. ..
...Although I myself prefer more lucid regular lines and par's as the old fashioned poetry's did;
but' I stand to be advised,

I will never learn how Im supposed to present my work! ....(because I just "dont get it")..
........but am happy to be corrected and advised........if you guys are willing to help....thanks again

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Very good write the only thing apart from what Jess said is that the later references that use the word love or loves can be changed as the word is there so bold to start with LOVE:-
intro:-Love,...... Not Needed my old memory remembered the title...
(Love) good or bad, .....Extra word not needed...
Where does (love) it reside today,... Still remember the theme....
to ease (loves) its pain, .....Just a plural of that word again...
Not sure but prefer the absence of the word once decried in the title.
Just a thought, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thanks Ian, took some of your advise Thks

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That is now spot on and flows well and means a lot..
On poetry now the layout and form you will need to attend one of the workshops, Probably one of Jess's, though we have the odd skirmish, he is one of the best, but don't you dare say I said so, lol, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

significant difference

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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