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Love Is Music

Submitted by loved on Thu, 2011-01-27 09:38

Love Is Music

Love shouldn’t be shown
But seen
Everyone who’s in love
Knows what it means

The silence
The simplicity
Warmth of a palm,
A quiet caress,
A sweet smile
Upon the harp
of a loving heart
Can place a song
Worth a million
Incomparable...
As the sweetest sounds are heard
In reverberation
Does it appear?
Like the loveliest tune
Abide With Me!
How wondrous

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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weirdelf

Wed, 2011-12-21 16:20

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and I know why it was there. No-one else had the courage to tell you it is trite and cliched.

Loved, you do come up with original gems. This isn't one of them.

cheers,
Jess
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loved

Fri, 2011-12-23 14:48

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Gems are rare
And
From my embalmed mind
One in a million
I guess.
I do accept....
That you will someday,
Teach me the magnificent art
And mould my heart,
Twill be a part of thy creativity Jess,
You now know,
How I play my part.

loved

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