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Love Handles

Submitted by gregwa8 on Sat, 2018-06-02 16:05

freckles, dimples, a cleft lip, a lazy eye --
all the little features you think determine why
nobody will love you, could actually turn out
to be the things your partner is crazy about

a limp that they like
from some accident on a bike
maybe slurred speech
whispering sweet-nothings at the beach

our imperfections and quirks
can hardly hold a candle

to exceptional desire
why do you think they call them
"love handles"?

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raj

Sat, 2018-06-02 16:08

I am not sure if your poem is about fetishes and also not sure how it got posted twice
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raj (sublime_ocean)

gregwa8

Sun, 2018-06-03 00:03

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haha. thanks markL. limber love! thanks for the thoughtful comments.

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