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Love and Golden Memory

My heart can't content to
the very fact of not being
with you again.
With every passing day
The mesmirizing illusion
Of yearning to be in your
Abode grasp my heart to stupor.
I still clinched to a love unattainable.
I wish love could give us a chance
again.
To share our hearts clenching desires.
To wake up to a tantilizing
Heart dropping of good will wishes from you.
To walk the street holding each others arm like kids
Who seems carefree to the
Rumbling noise around them.
To be quick to respond to each other even when all our differences glare to set us apart

I wish i could turn the the hands
of time to retrieve the pleasant
Memories that allures my heart
To keep me loving you.
Even when it layed bared
You're ain't gonna be here
To reciprocate that love.
What is left now is a
Golden memory..

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Thanks for allowing us to read your work! I look forward to reading more of your writing.

I would suggest only a couple of improvements… to increase the readability (in English)

For example:

With every passing day
The mesmirizing illusion
Of yearning to be in your
Abode grasp my heart to stupor.

Could become:

With every passing day my mesmerizing illusion of yearning
to be in your abode moves my heart to a stupor.

Also:

My heart can't content ——to could become—- “My heart can't be content “

It is challenging to write in one language and think in another.

Welcome again!

Ray

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Ray has already given you excellent advice... perhaps you would do well with a dictionary that translates you language to English?

*regards, Cat

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