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Love

I am.

A hand laid next to the female body.

I am,

here.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
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Line1: 'I am'. This is a bold definition of self. For sure, this is a voice of a randy guy!

I am,
here. All the girls within the vicinity will now flew like birds.

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

"I"
hurple t'ward the wabbit warren
of pomposity,

A reynard of levity--------- lost.

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