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Love

Submitted by goldilocks on Fri, 2017-12-29 09:26

What do I mean to you?
Do I make your heart skip too?
My heart skipped when I saw you,
I really didn’t want that ‘’Deja vu”
Am beginning to feel this is really true,
That all I can ever love is you,
You let your feelings dry up under the sun like dew
I love you
So much, I love you.
Please, be my prince too,
And help me lose my glass shoes,
Even if you won’t take me to the front of the pews
I know I will lose,
But it’s you I choose,
So the question is,
‘’Am I truly beautiful to you’’

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weirdelf

Wed, 2018-02-07 15:10

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You accidentally posted the same poem 3 times.
Click on the 'Unpublish' tab on the two that have not received comments .

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