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Lost in your Display Picture.

I'm just here staring at your dp... you're just so beautiful
And honestly to behold a being like you is a miracle
I wonder how atheists believe God doesn't exist
When I gain Faith with just one look at your face
It must've been fate for us to cross place
I mean for our paths to cross
We're lovers but we're not star crossed
But let me be your Romeo and be my Juliet
And if I lose you I would cry coz even God's shed tears
I mean even Jesus wept
Talking about Jesus He must've been the sculptor who carved your features
Coz only God can craft something so perfect
I know the angels look at you and get jealous
Because even with your imperfections to me you're still perfect

I wish I was beside you right now although that seems far fetched
But where there is a will there is a way
And I will definitely make a way
Through these waters split this sea like Moses
And I will walk through this wilderness
if you'll walk beside me for you're my oasis
In this desert.

I am at a loss for words
I am always at a loss for words...

Perhaps my heart will say the words my hands
Can't write and my brain can't fathom
Perhaps when you read this you will understand

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Structured: Western
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This poem was inspired by a girl I met on Twitter, we got talking and gradually we became friends.
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I wonder what "dp" means? (line 1)
And why use the slang "coz" word? (lines 9 & 12)

[This is a duplicate account of Edna Sweetlove and been permanently suspended]

DP means display picture I used it because well when you're chatting with your close friend, you tend to use abbreviations, plus DP also goes with the rhyme scheme. For using coz in place of because I will look into it. Thank you for your comment.

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Sadly I have no idea what you are talking about. Normally "dp" means "data processing".

[This is a duplicate account of Edna Sweetlove and been permanently suspended]

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