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Lost Wallet

Oh, to my lost wallet,
Where are you at?
I am lost without you
your return is a request
In the searching of lost item
that I call 9-11 for a rescue
I am guilty of abandoning you
to let you out of my sight
for my wrongdoing
Please do not hold your grudge
against me
for your forgiveness is a MUST
come back to me in my plead
you are my precious gift
that is close to my heart to
hold all my accessories of
money in a safety spot
to always be careful
As day turns night
and time passes by
It gives me wondering
of your absence to be found
in the possession of my hands
NEVER to lose you again

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Lost Wallet" utilizes personification to create a narrative around a common, relatable experience: losing a wallet. This technique helps to evoke emotion and engage readers. However, there are areas where the poem could be improved.

Firstly, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and meter. The irregular line lengths and varying syllable counts make the poem feel disjointed. A more consistent rhythm could help to improve the flow and readability of the poem.

Secondly, the language and phrasing could be refined. Some lines, such as "your return is a request" and "for your forgiveness is a MUST", come across as awkward and disrupt the overall tone of the poem. Experimenting with different phrasing could help to create a more cohesive and engaging narrative.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from more vivid imagery. While the concept of losing a wallet is relatable, the poem doesn't fully utilize the potential for sensory detail. Describing the wallet, the places it might be, or the feelings of the speaker in more detail could help to make the poem more engaging and immersive.

In conclusion, while the poem has a strong concept and effectively uses personification, improvements could be made in terms of rhythm, language, and imagery.

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