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I feel like a lost thing sitting on a shelf, and that's because I can't find myself.

I'm losing myself at all cost and I'm supposed to be my own boss!?

I hate it and if I don't change it'll be to late to seal my fate. I don't know who I am! my life is going down like quicksand.

Being lost is a funny thought. I'm supposed to be grown but I'm fighting in a war that should't be fought.!

Dam thats just how I was taught, so who's really in fault?

I can't blame cause it's me and i'm still the same...deep inside; a version of me im trying to hide.

I'm trynna get by, but I just keep getting hit by all side's. and i'm highkey trying to hide...

Whers's the old me? the real me? I feel like this life....

 

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

you have only been a member of Neo.
for a few hours, so I will try and help you out.

1] This is not free-verse, it is rhyme
2] Trying to rhyme just to have words rhyme, does not make it poetry
3] You are losing yourself at all costs? What does that mean?
4] You will be too late to seal your own fate?

There are many levels where this is all wrong. I will do you a favor
and straighten out your thoughts and try to make this a poem
Then I want you to finish it!

I feel like a lost thing
sitting on the shelf
and that's because
I can't find myself

I don't want to fight this war
Being lost is a funny thought
My sanity is what I'm fighting for
A battle worth being fought

I have no one to blame
there is nowhere to hide
I just keep doing the same
I know it deep inside

You finish it! ~ Geezer.
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