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The Longing
Streaming eyes
dampening the spirit
a thread bare winter coat
fighting chills
rushing through denuded limbs
autumn wrought upon
that Summer Eve
Will spring bring back
the goosebumps
before the flurry like kisses
my lips keep
disappear in the greens
like dreams
Or will the spring return
with lavender and roses
sparkling with dew drops
my eyes seek
while summer in my bosom
keeps your warmth
like orchids
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lovedly
Wed, 2015-04-29 14:48
you are raj
becoming a seasoned poet
of NEOPOET
and the best one at that
all
even jess
will vouch
I RETURN
TO LEARN
with due concern
raj
Wed, 2015-04-29 14:55
Thanks for your time and
Thanks for your time and visit Lovedly
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentlovedly
Fri, 2015-05-01 04:30
great
yes great do read mine and C R I T Q U E TOO
I may improve like you
too
raj
Fri, 2015-05-01 06:47
ok I will
ok I will
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentalidzain
Fri, 2015-05-01 15:55
Raj
I really love this piece. smooth flow, wonderful images. Love it.
Alid
raj
Sat, 2015-05-02 14:43
Thanks Alid for your time.
Thanks Alid for your time..read and comment...
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentRula
Fri, 2015-05-01 13:31
raj
Great imagery through out. I love it but in some places I really thought you need to add some punctuation.
But it's up to you of course.
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raj
Fri, 2015-05-01 14:43
Thank you Rula for your time
Thank you Rula for your time and visit. You are one of the very few who find it worthy to visit and comment.
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentRula
Sat, 2015-05-02 17:29
You're always welcome.
raj. Always looking forward to reading from your pen.
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raj
Sat, 2015-05-02 17:16
Thanks Rula for your kind
Thanks Rula for your kind words..
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentraj
Sun, 2015-05-03 04:21
Thanks Rula.
Thanks Rula.
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentSeren
Thu, 2015-05-07 12:49
Raj
Your growth is amazing and is clearly shown in this write ... your becoming a bard my lord ... alas but it is true, smile.
My favourite poem of ALL of your poems
love and big hugs Jayne xox
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
raj
Thu, 2015-05-07 13:11
Thank you Jayne for your time
Thank you Jayne for your time..visit and comment..
much love and hugs..
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentSeren
Wed, 2016-03-02 06:42
had to come back again and
had to come back again and read it over a few times
it as beautiful tonight as it was the first time I read it my friend
I gushed last time but in the present now
I sigh
love and biggest hugs Jayne xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
raj
Wed, 2016-03-02 13:48
Hi again Jayne
Your words of appreciation made me overwhelm because its not very often I hear them...will inspire me to improve continually and keep me on the learning curve..
Many thanks, much love and warm tight hugs..
take good care..be well..
raj (sublime_ocean)
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