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A lonely Vietnamese Just Creative

A lonely Vietnamese

These twenty passed something years
I stand as an isolated stooge
no one loved me
when in Vietnam
none loves even now
though I am out of it

where is God
O some one say
does he too not love
my way

but then each day
I get messages
come son allure
don't worry
you have no job only
I am as lonely
laying on times floor

but poetry alone
I vomit daily
see I have so many friends
now only..
so many plus more+
on my
Waiting List
they alone have made
out of lovedly
a poet- tree

a lonely Vietnamese
O really!

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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A cry from the roots, a good write keep up these pieces as they are worth reading.
Try not to fold your feelings too much into the theme, a biography is OK as a biography but I feel that you should, after your rough draft make your poem a piece to relate to everyone that comes from a situation of the world.
Tjis will then make it appeal to many more.
Your pieces of late are beginning to evolve into what we have been telling you for the last few years young Bard.
Take care and know we are here for you as always,
Yours Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

that I am evolving as one

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