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LONELY

I am as lonely as the strand of white hair
on the head of a little boy.

Visible but not seen,
Outspoken but not heard.

I am lonely as the strand of white hair
on the head of a little boy.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments

platinum blonde? Just one? Who told you? LoL just a little teasing here. ~ Geezer.
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