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Loneliness Warms

So many run to see
how loneliness is really
enjoyed by some
you are not alone
just one

let the sands
in the desert make you feel
like an oasis
when poets- like shall come
awaken their inner emotions
with your magnetic vibrations

all said and done
cliche number one
in my this only poem

we all are like camels
in a lonely desert
not only you
we are in addition

times' loneliness bells
in windy dry sandy wells
(desert)
not alone
with musicians
me and you
not only you
so many following you
me too

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AND GEES CONTRIBUTION MY FRIEND IS GEEEEEE
rides again, on camel-back!

Sands of the desert blow dry and hot
Dunes of dust, choke my throat
A castle of sand for a king
A drawbridge crosses an empty moat. ~ Geez.

BOWS LOADS OF THANKS

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
DESERTS BELLS SANDY TOLL LONG DISTANCE..... FOR JUST anyone come along more the merrier
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Hello, Lovedly,
I don't really get a lonely feeling here - more of a contentment with being alone. I like the idea of the musicians and the bells in the desert. You have a lot of imagery in this piece - I can almost see the camel prints in the sand as they move along.
Thank you!
L

my path of loneliness
that's warm
stay strong
ring a gong
and on a camel's back
go along
sing a one ttime's known song
loneliness would be gone

author comment

rides again, on camel-back!

Sands of the desert blow dry and hot
Dunes of dust, choke my throat
A castle of sand for a king
A drawbridge crosses an empty moat. ~ Geez.
.

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with your magnetic VIBRATIONS

(smiles)

author comment

what you mean. Glad you like it though.~ Geez.
.

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