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That little bird.

That little bird of muffled song
None may care to listen for
Whose lonely soul it strings along
That breaks with every metaphor

Who chirps inside those heedless ears
And hummed by worn-out hearts
Who finds itself among the tears
That turn themselves to art

That little bird of muffled song
forgotten by every wind
And only when the tune is truly gone
Will they ask of it to sing

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in a romantic bent, this is the kind of poem I would choose! It has the flavor of an early 1900's poet and reminds me of something that E.B. Browning, Joanna Fuchs or Mark Warren would write. The pacing and the theme are well done, and the language also. Flowing smoothly from beginning to end, this one is well written. ~ Geez.
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good language usage... i really liked the flow...solid poem I felt it my soul! keep writing. maybe you would care to read other Neopoet's poems and comment on them?

*always, Cat

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