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LIFE'S STAIRCASE
What sense does it make
that as the legs grow weaker
the steps grow steeper?
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Structured: Eastern
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loved
Sat, 2012-01-14 00:47
You are like me Sir
the creator of hycoo,yes
in its free style.
loved
scribbler
Sat, 2012-01-14 10:04
hi loved
just a question put in verse lol........stan
author commentloved
Sun, 2012-01-15 06:59
simply put
extraordinary...
loved
Ian.T
Sat, 2012-01-14 03:36
Stan
My dear friend, why do you think I live in a bungalow.
In my stupidity I put floor boards in the attic, and stored a lot of stuff up there in that other planet.
A land of bric-a-brac home to the odd creature that needs a place to go in the Winter LOL, great little piece Take care,Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
scribbler
Sat, 2012-01-14 10:08
hi Ian
Have built and lived in 2 houses with 2 stories. Present abode was designed and built with single floor due to old knees lol.....stan
author commentscribbler
Sat, 2012-01-14 10:10
hi Mark
Haiku and rhyku come in handy for short thoughts don't they? thanks for dropping by...........stan
author commentloved
Sat, 2012-01-14 05:33
i have always observed that if u continue to SEXIFY YOU Will
feel satisfied
and the weakness will vanish
within a week...
hahaha
my last comment... seems to have vanished
in super thin hair...
thinner than mine
loved
scribbler
Sat, 2012-01-14 10:12
Hi loved
Last comment still here but I don't mind a second one lol. I really wish cure for painful knees was that easy lmao......stan
author commentloved
Sun, 2012-01-15 07:02
All pain is
in the mind
we just feel it
and at times we are numb.
hope you shall find ,
a remedy soon ...
loved
scribbler
Sun, 2012-01-15 08:10
hi loved
The remedy is total knee replacement which I am unwilling to endure yet but see having to do before much longer. thanks for your concern........stan
author commentRoscoe Lane
Sun, 2012-01-15 05:07
I have,
I have no answers, but agree whole heartedly,.Ha. Regards Roscoe...
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
scribbler
Sun, 2012-01-15 08:11
hi Roscoe
No answer really expected lol. thanks for visiting...........stan
author commentNordic cloud
Mon, 2012-01-16 14:05
I felt the weight of the six silver buttons
And another one by a Norwegian poet- the gist of it anyhow :-
It was
when I felt the weight
of the six silver buttons
on my knitted jacket
as I went up the stairs
that I realised I was old.
Oh its beautifully expressed in the Telemark dialect and I haven't done it justice, but you get the idea Stan?
Luckily Erik and I walk every day and go fast through the woods brandishing our Nordic walking sticks, its a bit like skiing, some kindergarten children even said, look they have forgotten their skis! Erik is 87 and that's good going, no aches and pains in his knees or hips. We consider ourselves lucky. Wish I could stop your pain, everyone's pain.
Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
scribbler
Mon, 2012-01-16 17:14
Hello Ann
It's good to know ya'll are still getting around well. I have none to blame but my own carelessness for my aches and pains.............stan
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