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Life

Growing up as a little boy
Life keep tossing like a water boil
We keep having Faith for life to coil
Yet like any other boy, it spat us on the face

Looking up to daddy as the head of the family
Thinking he can handle everything like the films in Bollywood
Not understanding that even daddy has a lot worries
And he also is hoping all can varies

Until we look only unto God
And understand that that's all we've got
Then only will we acquire all we want
And enjoy them as we've always hunt.

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I think is your message. Even with the cants and thrns of growing up human….

Looking forward to reading more of your work!

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