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Lies and Other Methods of Survival...

“I like your new dress”

{Shit, now she'll wear that thing all the time}

“It's not so bad, once the color fades out a little”

{What the hell possessed a fifty-year old woman to dye her hair purple?}

“Naahhh...You aren't bothering me”

{Now, I'll miss my favorite show}

“I'll be happy to watch little Joey!”

{My dog needs something to chase around the yard}

“Sure, I'd love to give you a ride”

{If there is gas left from the last dollar you gave me}

“No, I love kids, bring them over any time”

{Leave them in the yard and pick them up when you leave}

“That's ok, honey, I understand”

{What I don't understand is how you were fine until now}

“Of course, I love you”

{Just don't ask me now}

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The things we say when we are playing the part, makes you wonder if anyone actually cares or if life is just a well orchestrated facade that we are all actors in various roles play a part in.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

the theme for another poem! Lol See, there are unending amounts of things to inspire the poet in all of us! Thanks, ~ Gee.
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So many things..so little time to write

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

I really like the idea of this poem, it's very clever, but i think it would be more fun and "poetic" if it rhymed...like Ogden Nash or Shel Silverstein. Here is fun, but is more "stand up" than a poem for me. I think the rhyming could create very funny images to respond to the statements, too

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

to work on that Eumo. It was just something that I played with the other day. With all the flap about rhyming being passé and childish, I thought that maybe I should try more avenues and... well, you know. Gee.
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It must work your still surviving and laughing about it. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

It works. I have refined my technique over many years. Just be careful not to verbalize your secondary replies or you'll find yourself crying in your beer or whatever you drink to ease the pain of
your slap in the face or kick in the bollocks. Glad you enjoyed, ~ Gee.
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Really like the use of parentheses to demonstrate the thoughts and the title is captivating.

The last few really hit home. It's so easy to be taken advantage of when people ask so much, but we know they need the help and we're the ones who have a hard time saying no.

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I have a few people in my life that are like that, but figure that is part of my Karma. I think if there is anything to the notion that there is re-incarnation and you come back to atone for and learn lessons from, that I must have been "Attila The Hun", in my last life. Lol. I'm glad that you like the parentheses, I use them like that every now and then. ~ Gee.
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