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LETS UNITE DESPITE OUR DIFFERENCE

The fragments of diverse norms and traditions,
Scattered around the entity.
Glued by the colonial greed,
branded with a label, Ni-ge-ria.
We are not one, we are not one,
Since 67 till date.

For oneness is our strength,
Like lions to their prey.
Tribalism and nepotism you should kill,
for in their hands the keys to division.

This heritage of our forefathers,
Never a campaign to disunity,
but an instrument of love and harmony.

Come together, come together.
Let hands wash hands,
In the river of unity and peace.
forget the hatred of the night,
and focus on the fragrance of Unity.

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I love my country Nigeria and i want unity to reign, despite our difference.

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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I don't want to get into the politics of the theme, but I understand the sentiments. You seem to have the country's interest at heart and it shows. I wonder if someday, the people of Earth will get the message, that we are all stuck here on this planet together and we have to get along. If we don't, sooner or later, we will destroy ourselves and this planet. I suppose that we will just go find us another one to screw up? Nice work as far as I can tell. ~ Geezer.
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thanks in a greater way

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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to understand your politics.
The words and poetry make us understand.

cheers,
Jess
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don't make us wait so long next time, ok?
And remember to give feedback to others, that's how this site works.

I get your passion, it is welcome.

cheers,
Jess
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thanks, it will be available very soon

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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read at least ten poets
and comment on all
thank all those
who read you tooo

get out of your
shell
we don't believe in racialism
all of us are normally human

my two gals twins sisters
gf/then friends
were from Nigeria too
you were not even born then
or were you!

i will do exactly that too

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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read ten poems
before one you thrust
then we all will know
as you third one I have read to day
how the river of poetry flows
with all Neos
Just don't expect comments
nor appreciation
unless you give
ere you partake
no one has welcomed you yet
is it a mistake

your command my wish sir

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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to me i think my country is strongly braking apart, how i wish i have the power to stop it

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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A nice call for unity Chiori.Beautifully expressed. But I think the word "LETS" needs an apostrophe.

Thank you bro. will be very conscious next time

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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