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The Leprosy Tango

THIS IS THE LEPROSY TANGO. Imagine a lepers' hospital somewhere in the jungle; it's St Valentines Day and everyone is looking for love. The music begins and a solo voice rises up tunefully...

I think I've got leprosy;
At least the doctors
Assure me it's so.

Oh! Oh! Oh!

I'm pleased I've got leprosy;
At least for the moment,
Till my privy parts go.

One by one my bits
And pieces, they drop off
And I must be so careful
Whenever I cough.

Yes! Yes! Yes!

Oh yes, I have leprosy
And I'm so happy
'Cos it's a great way to go.


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These are some revised lyrics for that well known tango "Jealousy" written in the early years of the 20th century by Ernesto Lecuona (1895-1963). I used to have a 78 record of this played by the Mantovani Orchestra - my dog (a Pyrenean Mountain bitch) went into a frenzy when she heard it - clearly the solo violin mjust have sounded like a fellow Pyrenean calling for a mate. Listen to the music and sing-a-longa Edna! Here's the original recording: (you'll need to cut and paste it)
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certainly got my attention! As per usual, I was intrigued by your humor. The rhythm matched the music very well and could be the basis for a Monty Python skit. I am not a big fan of Leprosy per se, but an interesting topic to say the least. ~ Geezer.

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A good write,
want to know if this is going to be serialised or just in several parts.
Take care have a great day,
Yours Ian ..

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That's a fantastic idea!

But I was thinking of a dance themed series...
...The Diarrheoia Waltz
...The Incontinence FoxTrot
...The Syphilis Samba
...The Tetanus Twostep.

and so on.

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Rhythm pattern pacing spot on.
Lovely punctuation.
Subject matter ridiculous and not imo humorous.
But that is your style Edna I think to be provocative, and to get people thinking. But for me this is a total turn off. A fun idea but lousy subject matter.


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Yes, you! If that is not the intention it is certainly very effective. Am laughing here. Sam.


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