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A Legacy of Love

Kickin' it at the "homestead"
yo-yo goin 'round,
a mesmerizin', tantalizin'
sight without a sound.

This world, it keeps on turnin'
spinning like a top;
without those revolutions
from the sky, our world would drop!

The circle of life keeps rollin'
and the cycle echos, growth,
good or bad, the life you've had
can't help but echo, both;

and when that cycle winds itself
down, and stops goin' 'round,
the only thing one takes along
is all the love that one has found !

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Structured: Western
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Comments

great job in creating the turning of our world in a single life span.
that all it is to each indiviual.
Always Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

Another good un doc. Wouldn't be me if I didn't offer some alternatives though lol :
l-9 try : life's circle keeps on rollin'
l-13 delete "and"
l-14 move "down" to end of l-13

Here's hoping you have the best of holiday seasons............scribbler

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