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Leaves of life
I rest my weary head
against the earths
tender timber bed
Burnished by the
Blissful but yet bold
color of brown . Carrying
It’s colorful
coruscating
crown of the luscious
Leaves of life .
that once carried
the callow clean
Color of green
now hold the adept
colors of
orange and gold.
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Virginia, USA
Favorite Poets
Edgar Allan Poe homer Dante Alighieri Oscar Wilde, William Wordsworth
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Geezer
Fri, 2021-02-12 18:40
A very colorful...
image in my mind! I like the way that you have blended and smoothed the sentences with the "B' and 'C' beginnings.
I don't know about the use of the word [adept], but it doesn't seem to hurt the overall scheme. Perhaps leaf it 'B'. ~ Geez.
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Edward nigma
Fri, 2021-02-12 19:18
Thank you
Thank you for your opinion it is always a pleasure to hear from you
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.
author commentLavender
Fri, 2021-02-12 21:35
Leaves of Life
Hello, Edward,
I feel as if I've traveled through the life of a leaf. Bold imagery within a subtle journey.
Thank you!
L
Edward nigma
Fri, 2021-02-12 21:39
Thank you
Thank you for reading my inspiration for this was two songs by frank Sinatra I can read between the lines and autumn leaves.
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.
author commentLavender
Fri, 2021-02-12 21:50
Aw...
Both very sad and lonely songs / lyrics. I've noticed you've been inspired by Frank Sinatra before. He was one of a kind.
Thank you,
L
mddy
Sat, 2021-02-13 02:20
Dear Edward
Such a beautiful set of words! Powerful imagery aswell!
-{Madeline With Love ♥}
Edward nigma
Sat, 2021-02-13 05:42
Thank you
Thank you
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.
author commentEdward nigma
Sat, 2021-02-13 10:23
Thank you
I wanted to portray the journey of life or aging I usually compare life to other things like nature like leaves and birds .
Thank you for pleasant comment
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.
author commentEdward nigma
Sun, 2021-02-14 06:52
Thank you
Thank you
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.
author commentBreakinglogic
Sun, 2021-02-14 08:04
Edward,
Edward,
This is some really interesting characterization. I think it is surprising to say that timber is tender; the way you put it, however, is oddly appropriate. Comfortable even, if I can say that. I like the way you compare the matured leaves to their "callow" beginnings while honoring both equally. Beautiful work
☆ raffy
Edward nigma
Sun, 2021-02-14 21:15
Thank you
Thank you for your kind opinion
Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.
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