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Leaf

sweet breeze
or howling gale
I fly by it

I am
a dry leaf
not held by weight

I will
love until
I crumble

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not hold by weight

not held!!! by... may be okay/better if u will

have you read my Feb poetry
kindly do and advise
I'm freer now till tomorrow

I did .
Thank you.

IRiz

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making most of life we are blessed with by overcoming adversities is what I read between the lines...at least that is how i perceived it...

loved the presentation of message....

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you.

IRiz

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