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Leaderless Times UPDATE

A witness or more
are watching
the arrogance that
flows through those
wolves in sheep's
clothes who would
if they could
steal the eyes
from the living
and the dead,
to hide in their
disguise those
conservative right
who lay claim
to their Faith
will fill their coffers
with hate and war
at the expense
of the hungry and poor,
the weak, the sick
and the old.
But try as they might
a witness or more
are watching them
as they sit up on high
where mere earthly glory
befits them
nothing more,
nothing more than
clanging cymbals
empty of the language
of love.

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and I am in the choir. I so understand our need to express the daily outrage, the inconceivable lack of intelligence and compassion on display in our country. Like the poetry written in the Vietnam ear, there will be many anthologies of poems which capture the times we now live in, and will define it for the generations to come. I personally am relying more on satire. But ether way we are not reaching those you are describing, they don't they don't read poetry. They are not sensitive to anything outside the tribal babble of white trash they worship.
So I appreciate your poem, and all the rants I read including my own, and you have written a fine poem. I call them Populesque Trumpius. They are the Roman mob who have sworn their allegiances. Maybe one day they will change...perhaps when their children scold them!

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

I appreciate your point of view as it is certainly mine as well. I do agree that the ones who are witless and unaware or don't care how their behavior effects human misery and despair are not readers of poetry. I have written several rageful poems that brought out some good, bad, and nasty responses from readers. This particular poem was written more as a catharsis for me as I must sometimes do to keep my sanity.
I am glad you enjoyed the read.

Respectfully.

Marthalyn

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What an accurate poem about the so called liberals of this day and age. They walk around with their hatred and just keep accusing others of thing which They are guilty of. They even have their own "brown shirts" to enforce their ideology of intolerance and hatred(although they are masked and dressed in black. And their so called leaders want nothing less than to turn us into some globalist socialist society.

I appreciate your comment on my poem, but would you have written anything differently... language, title, beginning or ending, etc. I am compelled to comment on one thing you stated regarding a "globalist socialist society". Each word has more than one definition in different contexts. I agree that the 'globalist' economy is in serious danger of collapse, e.g. America is the top domino and when it falls, well, suffering everywhere will be like nothing we've ever seen before. "Socialist" systems can take many forms, like dictatorial communism, or democratic socialism, e.g. No one person controls huge companies, rather each worker owns a part of it and banks are less powerful than credit unions. The greatest danger I see here in America is the growing idea of Nationalism which attempts to purge the "undesirables", and this reminds me of the early days of Hitler's Nazis...a good history lesson is in how the 1929 stock market crash played a major role in the Nazi uprising. It was the banks that called in their loans to Germany after WWI that forced unfathomable Nationalist cruelty. Please forgive me for my lengthy commentary. It is nearly impossible for me to abstain from it.
Respectfully,

Marthalyn

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I had hoped you would catch the implied compliment that you'd written a poem which could be taken different ways according to who was reading it. Oh well, onward to meager critique lol. You might try "mere earthly glory" and From the living. Also since you think the title might not be all that it could be how about" Leaderless Times". It might be apt in describing a time when so few lead .

I do like your suggestions and think they will improve my poem. I also appreciated you "implied complement" from your first critique. Both are welcomed and helpful.

Respectfully,

Marthalyn

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